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Speaking Silence by Fizza Rahman Rahman (12)
"keep it up" -- salman.
"great work dev........ agar tum ne khud likha hai,then u've done a gr888888 job... keep it up!!!!!! love ,,,,sarah......" -- sarah.
"hey.you done a really good job. very romantic approach hhhhmmmmmm. " -- nida*, karachi, sindh, pakistan.
"Excellent very nice a true lover feeling.but never keep silence in love " -- sadaf, karachi, sindh.
"hmmm..it is good but the author needs little bit words balancing and continuty factor...but over all its a nice romantic poem..." -- Kash.
"Azaad Nazam.. azaad shaire is independent of continuity factors yar !" -- Fiz, karachi.
"it doesnt matter tht it's a NASRI NAZAM or QAFIYA NAZAM infact continuity sense to a flow which is the major phenomenon of mature poetry...kash" -- kash.
"mature poetry..yup i m not so i cant too :>" -- fiz.
"yaar ab iss poetry ko mature nahi toh kya childish poetry kahain gay...ehsaas-judayee,mohabbat,speaking silence dont seem to be immature... " -- kash.
"thnx for ur criticism dost,i'll try to cover up wth these too in future! thnx anywayz" -- Fiz.
"this is really awsome fizza..:)..i must say u hve a gr8 taste of writing..:)" -- Faizzan, Lahore, Punjab, Pakistan.
"Nice Work !!" -- S.Summaiya Haider, karachi, sindh, pakistan.


Decisions Of Allegiance by Peter Rivendell (3)
"You have captured a difficult feeling. Try shortening your lines though. You are putting too much in each. They should be glimpses of thoughts or visuals. Proper sentences rarely have the same effect. I would rework this one, it is worth the time!" -- Sylvia.
"I think when I wrote this, the idea was that it was a letter to someone I desperately needed to speak to, but who wouldn`t speak to me, for the terrible truth is I wrote this in 1980 when I was 18. I couldn`t possibly make any material changes to it now - it`s a historical document!" -- Peter Rivendell.
"I understand. It's a shame, but it does make sense. The structure reads better as a letter." -- Sylvia.


The Voice by R Bennett Okerstrom (15)
"Deep and dark. Your usual work. Keep 'em comin'!" -- Talon.
"But of course! Thanks Talon. You are always so generous!" -- R. Bennett.
"Exceptional!!!!!! A kindred spirit????? Perhaps. Will most assuredly devour more!!!!!" -- Judith, Tampa, FL, USA.
"Dark, but very intriguing! Another great piece of work!!" -- JM.
"Darkness is my specialty." -- R. Bennett.
"Then you must not sleep peacefully with yourself--something we have in common. Darkness doesn't scare me, because I, like you, have moments of brightness." -- mia angello, WI.
"On the contrary. I sleep very peacefully with myself. I just happen to embrace the darkness more openly than others." -- R. Bennett .
"Yes, R bennett, you are right ... some of us do welcome the darkness more than others, this poem is one my favorites" -- Judith.
"I'm glad you like it. It kind of teases the victim. They won't see their fate until it is too late." -- R. Bennett Okerstrom.
"Perhaps some sense it, but welcome it ..." -- Judith.
"I on the other hand do not so like the darkness, always prefer to see whats coming my way, I did like this poem however...mandi" -- Amanda Shorter, va, usa.
"Sometimes you cannot even see what is right before your eyes. " -- R. Bennett .
"Awesome. Simply, awesome." -- The Reviewer.
"Love it... and I want to publish it in the Black Rose Poetry Book but I need to get a hold of you!!!" -- Reagan Rothe, TX.
"I sent you an e-mail Reagan." -- R. Bennett.


My Mother by Sadaf Shahab (3)
"OH THATS " THE BEST " OF ALL U WRITTEN.... I JUST LOVE IT ....ITS WONDERFUL..." -- SAIMA, karachi, sind, pakistan.
"hmm.....a gud poem ,inspired by faiz ahmed faiz..haan..? well a good effort..koshish karen k samjha dya karen na ammi g ko..!" -- fizza, karachi, pakistan, sindh.
"good poem, short and bitter sweet!" -- sunny, dc, usa.


Silent Killers by Stuart Eric Longridge (1)
"Your parallels are unfounded and preposterous!" -- Brian O Neil.


Catch The Moon by Peter Rivendell (3)
"I really like this one. Only one thing I would change. "And we know we must speak." I personally would loose the first we in this line. Very nice." -- Sylvia.
"I thought about your change, but felt it disturbed the rhythm, so have made a more radical change." -- Peter Rivendell.
"I like the change. Good choice." -- Sylvia.


Empowered By My Own Karma by Stuart Eric Longridge (1)
"You have anger allright, that you have perfected!" -- Brian O Neil.


Forgive Me by Mia Angello (1)
"Nonetheless, breaking up should be permanent." -- R. Bennett Okerstrom.


Waves Within by Mia Angello (1)
"You take me to so many places in my mind... Remembering Hearts Heart in a bottle... Poured into your hand... Flows through fingers... Dripping off the tips... You close your hand... All you have... Is what you remember... A memory... And now you are scared... To open your hand........ " -- James W. McRight Jr., Ruffin, SC, USA.


Soulbond by Mia Angello (2)
"I see a lot of oceans, salt and souls in your work. I'm having thoughts of vacationing in the Bahamas or maybe Florida. Yeah, Clearwater Beach Florida is nice right now." -- R. Bennett Okerstrom.
"Beautiful verse! You write with craft and passion. Thanks for sharing..................peace!" -- Richard Evans.


-Untitled- by Tim Baker (2)
"Dear Tim, This piece is fantastic. You really struck a chord with me with this one. I have read all your work posted because I saw that you too are from Adelaide. My name is Juliet and I too am a struggling writer. I am a 23 year old english literature student at uni Sa. Not that I'm trying to get recognition. I mainly do my work for me so I can release what insanity I have in my head but if people like my work it's all a bonus. You have a great gift and never change your work for anyone. Never compromise your work for small minded individuals. You know who you are and what you want, if they can't see that then stuff them. You have the ability to be great. Live your dream. "A good book is never exhausted. It goes on whispering to you from the wall." Anatole Broyard. Keep it up and I'm sure I will hear about you in the future and say I knew his work way back when." -- Juliet, adelaide, SA, Australia.
"Tim, this piece is too good to leave untitled, may I suggest something like "Growing Pains" or "Heart on a Wire" or some such thing! Anyway, I liked it because it was honest, passionate and written from the heart! Reminded me of how I felt when I was twenty one a long time ago! I know you hate to hear things like "Good Job" so let me conclude by saying never give up on your dreams and keep writing!!!" -- Monte.


Words by Catherine Phillippa Susan Dally (1)
"The meaning of this is lost to me, I think you need to be more clear about what you want to say with this one. You obviously like to write and you do have alot of potential. I noted a typo that your spell checker missed, the word exist has one s not two, something you might want to fix when you rework this poem." -- Monte.


Why You Never Loved Me... by Alberto Pupo (1)
"Hey Albert Its your cuz. well nice poem even though i dont understand it lol well ttyl Bye say hi to nemo and leane. I LOVE YOU!!!! Bye :)" -- Dilianna Padron , Miami, U.S.A, Florida.


Vampire by Judith Goff (2)
"Such a curse is welcomed by many. Read my title "Eternal Desire" or "The Voice" among others." -- R. Bennett Okerstrom.
"Please email me because it's been discovered that you've been plagiarized. Thanks, B [email protected]" -- B.


The Ill-Mannered Guest by Asif Khan (1)
"Hi, why nobody responds me?" -- Maria, New York, NY, united states.


Silently Screaming by Catherine Phillippa Susan Dally (1)
"This is really good. The rhyming seems a bit forced in the first stanza. I loved this line "What can the truth really do? that it already hasn�t done"...it's very deep. Great job! Keep it up!" -- Karen.


Sick For You by Catherine Phillippa Susan Dally (1)
"WOW! I loved the ending...what a twist! Great job!!" -- Karen.


Satirical Lyrical - Contemporary Poetry by Ulysses Hero (5)
"I can picture you sitting hip-shot on a wooden stool in a darkened coffee house, black beret drawn down over one eye; cigarette drooping from your lips beneath a pencil-thin moustache !!! Coooool" -- Judith Goff, Tampa, FL, Usa.
"I can picture a serial killer writing his note to the police for them to use to TRY and find him. I like it!" -- R. Bennett Okerstrom.
"Ulysses, I had to find out who you were and who was the person who lit up my day with their review. So I found you and read all your work. I have to say that it has been a privalege and an honor to have received a review from a most talented poet. Your poetries are masterpieces! My favorite is the last... and it does conjure an image in the mind. Mine is a University Student racking his brain and studying for his afternoon mid-term, in a coffee shop and decidedly resignated to do his best." -- Jacqueline, California.
"Why do you write poetry?" -- Jorge Freire.
"To: Jorge Freire. I'm unable to find your e-mail address so forgive my cameo reply: I don't really know is my answer; but I do know it's a passion that keeps me awake till 3 in the morning. I write poetry for a number of reasons: it helps me with my short stories and song writing, improves my english vocabulary. I consider Poetry the most difficult of writing disciplines and one I intend to master, and besides, I never like taking the easy route. " -- Ulysses Hero, England.


Ravenous by Judith Goff (13)
"Brilliant" -- Jack Brown.
"Gothic poetry! Like a werewolf in need of sustenance I have roamed the gothic web sites in search of decent gothic poetry - - I have found none. I have come to the conclusion that it must be the most difficult of arenas to pen. In regards to the above, well done. " -- Ulysses Hero, England.
"This parallels your "Vampire" poem like it should have been part of it. Maybe a continuation of it of sorts." -- R. Bennett Okerstrom.
"Great! Some gothic poetry for a change! Well written, it lingers in the mind for awhile after reading it. Check out my Vampire screenplay and tell me what you think! Doc" -- david doc byron, vincennes, us, ind.
"Thank you, Doc ... checked out your screenplay and reviewed for you. Check out some more of my stuff and give me your opinion !!!" -- Judith.
"I came across this little gem quite by accident. I am usually not into gothic and horror type stuff but this piece jumped off the page. I read it and reread several times and concluded that this is a fine piece of writing here. Looking forward to reading more of your stuff!" -- Robert ( Monte) Montesino, Florida, usa.
"Thank you for the rave review! I'm glad you enjoyed Ravenous. Be sure to give your opinion of the rest when you get around to reading them... you'll find i enjoy writing in many different styles ... some more successfully than others !" -- Judith.
"Though this is not usually the type of subject matter I enjoy I did find this poem to be something worth reading again, well written." -- MQW, B'burg, Va.
"Thank you, MQW !!!!!" -- Judith.
"I liked your artful vampire imagery...nice work!" -- mia angello, WI, USA.
"Thank you, Mia .... if you enjoy dark romance, please check out Amarantos and let me know how you like it !!!" -- Judith.
"God that gave me goose bumps..." -- Michelle.
"Michelle ... that was quite a compliment ... thank you !!!!" -- Judith.


Mohabbat by Fizza Rahman Rahman (24)
"WOW!!! I WILL JUST SAY "GREAT"......." -- SAIMA, karachi, sind, pakistan.
"kya baat hai yaar,tum to poori ki poori SHAIRA ho gai ho, good work......" -- sarah.
""i simply lov my this one yara"" -- fizza, karachi, pakistan, sindh.
"it is good, i accept that,,,,,,,,Great. " -- Ali Ayub, Lahore, Punjab, Pakistan.
"nikal wa ker rahon gi dearrrrrr" -- hina, karachi, sind, pakistan.
"Mohabatian Shumaar na kurna.." -- KaY, Pakistan.
"it is gr8..eXcellent work , !" -- Sahaab, islamabad, punjab, Pakistan.
"wah sahab wah !!" -- kash.
"hi" -- tayyab, sialkot, pakistan, punjab.
"gud try fizza ..... keeep it up budddy ....." -- hammad, karachi, sindh, pakistan.
"although some rthym is missing but nice try dear" -- sadia, karachi, sindh, pakistan.
"well fizza nice try kia baat he janaab ap ki kissi se pyaar vyaar ho gia he kia??? kher keep it up......" -- saad, karachi, sindh, pakistan.
"well,u rock!as u r my appi.......... ps refer to ur scrap book for full review!" -- Ahmed, Rawalpindi, Punjab, Pakistan.
"well...Fizza i'll be honest...haan dont mind...nice try keep it up but its like kid's level...u know da poem was not kinds ur level...all im sayin it u still need alot of work...n u still have a really long way to go" -- Fizza, Los Angeles, California, USA.
"Well Well, what to say, u r brilliant as always!" -- Kiran, Karachi, Sindh, Pakistan.
"after a huge round of applause [claps claps] i wd say u to keep up the good work . its amzing fr me to see such a huge collection of urs...... i must say all of them reflects ur good writin sense .....wud u mind tellin me ur most favourite ones n i'll chk them later ......i think they'll gv me a more sound idea bout ur good skills ...." -- muniba, khi, sindh, Pakistan.
"Fervent emotions indeed.. I'm impressed! :)" -- Kinza, Karachi, Pakistan.
"gr8 work..:) really impressed!" -- Faizzan, Lahore, Punjab, Pakistan.
"hi Fizza im a stranger to u but i read ur orkut profile and this poetry is very kool and wonderful...u can became a poetess.....take care bye bye..." -- Azeem Ikramzai, Multan, Punjab, Pakistan.
"Mukamal chahra! Kiya acha keha hai!! bohut khoob, no-khaiz-o-zerkhaiz zahen ki umda kawish. keep it up. Khuda karay zoor-e-biyan aur ziyada :) kuch main bhi arz kerta chalon. Mohabbat dard ki manind... kabi tu lutf daiti hai kabi phir lutf laiti hai!" -- Hardstone, Lahore, Pakistan, Punjab.
"salam fizza g..remind me i m naveen ur juniour.....kch yaad aya? ap ki poetry.....its awesome keep it uppppppp.pharmacy ki shaan fizza rehman" -- naveen, karachi, sindh, pakistan.
"salute to gD! guDH! :)" -- najum alam, karachi, sindh, Pakistan.
"Very gud....kafii achi hai" -- Ammara, IZloo, Punjab.
"Mein tau pehlay hi aapki fan huun!!!! aap alaaaaaaaaa hain!!!! ur ideas..ur thoughts...ur words and ur nature are worth praising!!!!! buhut achi poem hia!!!!!keep the gud work up! keeeeeep smiling :D :D :D :D :D :D :D !!!!!!" -- rabia, lhr, Pak.


Love Is Different by Sadaf Shahab (3)
"OH SADAF U R GREAT......" -- SAIMA, karachi, sind, pakistan.
"miss u hav don a gr8 job yara" -- fizza.
"A real trajedy of life. " -- sadaf, karachi, sindh.


Lonely by Catherine Phillippa Susan Dally (1)
"Sometimes, love has a way of finding you Catherine, your poem ends on a positive note "till I next find love" which I'm sure you will!!!" -- Monte.


Justice by Sadaf Shahab (1)
"good" -- fizza.


Just You And Me by Catherine Phillippa Susan Dally (1)
"i really really like it..." -- saima, karachi, pakistan.


Judaai by Fizza Rahman Rahman (10)
"yaar kon judda hoa hai kuch hame bhi to pata chale. bohaat zabardast hai." -- nida.
"aray nahi bhai...ye to bas aisay hi dil ki aik baat express kar di hai main nay..."" -- fizza, karachi, pakistan, sindh.
"good work fizza " -- asim.
"WOW....THATS REALLY GREAT.... I REALLY LIKE UR THOUGHTS...IT TOUCHED MY HEART....WELL DONE..." -- saima, karachi, sind, pakistan.
"uff it is good but some it want some more attention and interest." -- Ali Ayub, Lahore, Punjab, Pakistan.
"aisey nahin........kul baat hogi Inshallah" -- hina, karachi, sind, pakistan.
"hmmmm... dukh Judaii kai hatam nahi hotai terai aanai k baad kuch aur burh gain hain..." -- KaY, Sialkot, Pakistan.
"acha hai but thora sa wazan chahiye..." -- kash.
"once again...its too guud..:)" -- Faizzan, Lahore, Punjab, Pakistan.
"ACHI POEM HAI !!! starting buhut achi hia !!! :D :D :D :D" -- ROB, lhr, Pak.


Inner Songs by Sadaf Shahab (1)
"zabardast yaar." -- fizza.


I Trust Thee by Catherine Phillippa Susan Dally (1)
"This poem has a nice flow to it, but it would be nice to identify the object of your trust so your readers would be able to share more of what you are trying to say here!" -- Monte.


He Who Was Defiled by Musau (4)
"intense, powerful emotion with several levels of interpretation" -- laurie mcdaniel, Corpus Christi, TX, USA.
"your poem has no theme. It makes absolutely no sense. I am in 7th grade and i think my english teacher would give me a better grade then u on a poem assignment. Tell me who taught u how to write so i can sue the person for you. Good luck in the future believe me your gonna need it." -- bigA.
"Hey laurie! Were you high when you wrote this review? I must admit that this poem is better then the other garbage he writes but please don't encourage this guy." -- David.
"To the moron who claims to be in the seventh grade. Are you sure? Looks like a third grade comment to me. I fear for the next generation if you are in it. David! Who put you up to this? Some covert monkey who uses stupoos like you to do their dirty work. David, you are really stupid!!!!! I would love to have you in a classroom. I certainly could teach you a few things. I have taught at MIT. But an idiot of your caliber would not understand. Boo! Hoo!" -- MUSAU, Los Angeles, California, USA.


Girls by Sadaf Shahab (4)
"HI , I HAVE READ HER "GIRLS", N I M SO IMPRESSED.... I KNOW THE WRITER FOR A LONG TIME N I MUST SAY , SHE IS SO INTELLIGENT N HER THINKING POWER IS EXCELLENT.... THAT U CAN SEE IN THIS POEM....." -- SAIMA, karachi, sind, pakistan.
"zabardast" -- fizza.
"I think this is the real inner feelings of all girls.No matter where they live what they do.Girls are always have the feelings of insecurity. why million doollar question for UNO. " -- sadaf, karachi, sindh.
"very very very very excelent " -- shahroz anjum, rawalpindi, pakistan, punjab.


From Me To You Always by Catherine Phillippa Susan Dally (1)
"I WILL JUST SAY...GREAT" -- saima, karachi, pakistan.


Falling In Love With You by Catherine Phillippa Susan Dally (1)
"ITS A NICE THOUGHTS....ITS SIMPLE BUT VERY TOUCHING.... " -- saima, karachi, pakistan.


Every Thing Has Its Significance by Sadaf Shahab (1)
"excellent" -- fizza.


Ehsaas -E- Judaai by Fizza Rahman Rahman (6)
"quiet well!!!!" -- salman.
"OH GOD....THIS IS EXCELLENT....I MUST SAY ..." -- saima, karachi, pakistan.
"It is good but still needs more attention to improve." -- Ali Ayub, Lahore, Punjab, Pakistan.
"Excellent attempt, very sentimentaland touichy typical girlish view." -- sadaf, karachi, sindh.
"Very good, I really impressed by U fizz. but do some thing more for ur book, i want ur book in my hands, soon...OK" -- KaY, Sialkot, Punjab, Pakistan.
"Well done! " -- Zeeshan Ahmed, Pakistan.


Dont Let The Bastards Get You Down by L A Winterburn (1)
"You've done a great job at poking fun at a serious situation that affects all of us. What we need to remember is that, yes, it is serious, but don't let it get you down. " -- Karen.


Disclaimer by Tim Baker (1)
"If one has the priveledge to see these works in "real" life then they would see that words on a computer screen,while being effective, have no contest to words on a wall with paper..With a bold contrast between white and black there's an underlying concept that although written in B&W not everything seems that way.. Read the piece and create your own judgement of meanings, thats one of the things i like about this piece that while it is written from his persective it relates to all of us.. Keep up the Great work Tim!! (",) gEm" -- gEm, Adelaide, S.A, Australia.


Daytime Insomnia by Tim Baker (3)
"the lines convey a vivid impression,the title is meaningful,the poem has a clear theme and expresses it well !" -- asif.
"Hello, my name is Toni and I am the head publisher of a small new publishing house called Serendipity Press, we're looking for talented poets to publish in the first edition of our new magazine ; Musings. I wanted to know if you would be interested in letting us use one or two of your personal favorites. This is no joke, there is no pay, but you also don't have to pay a reading fee, and you get a free copy when its printed in December. So get back to us when you make your decision and I look forward to printing your work! :-) Sincerely, Toni J Lynch" -- Toni Lynch, USA.
"Hello again, Tim, sorry the e-mail address didn't post so here it is : [email protected]. Thanks Again. --" -- Toni J Lynch.


Comic by Ulysses Hero (2)
"Loved this ... evoked just the right touch of nostalgia for days gone by. By the way, what happened to your reviews of my work, Amarantos???? I have posted lots more ..." -- Judith Goff, TPA, FL, USA.
"second thing of urs i read after the collection. loved it. " -- The rube.


Can't You See by Catherine Phillippa Susan Dally (1)
"Oh my god !! I feel the f*cking same way !!!" -- tine.


Beauty by Sadaf Shahab (2)
"its the good poem by the authur but but my personal veiw is this that she needs osme guidence.shes good but very short in words. " -- sajjad, karachi, sindhi, pakistan.
" A BEAUTIFUL POEM BUT NEEDING A LITTE MORE CONCENTRATION IN GRAMMAR.WELL INDEED ITS A VRY GUD POEM..!" -- alishba ,fiz, karachi, pakistan, sindh.


Amanda by Diane Copeland (1)
"Nice work Diane." -- R. Bennett Okerstrom.


All Coz Of You by Catherine Phillippa Susan Dally (1)
"Always alone. :-(" -- R. Bennett Okerstrom.


Alcohol Passion by Catherine Phillippa Susan Dally (2)
"Alone. I am always alone." -- R. Bennett Okerstrom.
"Alcohol as with most drugs will lower inhibitions, impair judgement and if done to excess come back to bite you in the ass in the morning... as you well know! Your poem demonstrates nicely!" -- Monte.


A Dream Last Night by Catherine Phillippa Susan Dally (3)
"Dreams are only temporary." -- R. Bennett Okerstrom.
"Catherine, I like this a lot but I think you need to work on the last stanza, maybe just the last line to give it an edge. To "end" the poem and wrap it up. Really good job, otherwise." -- Karen.
"I would have to agree with Karen, something is missing here, like a solid ending that ties your first two stanza's together and reinforces your Title...Keep working this it has potential to become a better poem! " -- Monte.


Tomorrow Lies Beside Us by Sue (Sooz) Simpson (4)
"Ms. Simpson (Sooz) Wow! You are a gifted poet and talented writer. Your prose are beautiful and stories profound. I have not yet found any thing you have written that I didn't like. I am looking forward to reading it all, thanks for posting your work!" -- Monte, USA.
"Aww Bless you, I'll take all the friends I can get. But you just hang on in there I've written some stuff that is so bad it's shocking I'm sure it's only a matter of time before you find something terrible. Thank-you for your support AND all your time. " -- Sooz, Dalton-in-Furness, England, Cumbria.
"Olde Sergei�s Review: Inspiring" -- Cam Davis.
"Nice one Sooz I was wondering if you were still around,i just found this by accident,i have some new ones as well ,you were the first person to give me half decent reviews ,so thank you." -- Stuart Eric Longridge, Belfast.


To All The Trees by Ivonne Le�n Vonchyta (1)
"This Poem Is very nice, because I love trees." -- Fatima, Lima, Lima, Poema.


Three Mile Gap by Sue (Sooz) Simpson (4)
"I liked this one alot, it was humourous, profound and sad all at the same time. Such a wide range of emotions,with so few words, the three inches of bed space bit made me laugh! I loved those two sentence's in your second paragraph, although I think you mean't curled "fetal like" as oppose to "foetally". Your conclusion is perfect! Who was it that said, "Women are from Venus, Men are from Mars" Your story reflects this sentiment beautifully. " -- Monte, usa.
"Interesting little piece. Very descriptive and humoouous." -- Darcy K. Metz, B.C., Canada.
"Thanks Both. I don't mind this one." -- Sooz, Dalton-in-Furness, England, Cumbria.
"Olde Sergei�s Review: Excellent " -- Cam Davis.


This City I Call Home by Will Cameron (4)
"I don't really like poetry with structural formats such as yours but there was an interesting theme there. " -- iam.
"I think this is a very good poem. It shows depth and its obvious you care about your home town. Keep on writing Will and im sure youll do well." -- Francis James Chudley, England.
"This is a fine poem using a great sense of ryme and beat. I tell you, this is one of the finest I have read" -- e. rocco caldwell.
"I really liked this. Very image inducing, very heart felt. I loved the atmosphere of it. Fantastic!" -- Collins.


The Vagabond Heart by David B Doc Byron (4)
"shit i hate it when people take their own life and make sobbing sentimentality out of it...please spare us. i could neither visualize or feel the poem." -- sunny, DC, USA.
"Actually, I've been that woman--so I could relate! So thanks for sharing." -- mia angello, WI, USA.
"I like sobbing sentimentality and could really visualize this. Good work!" -- Michael Upchurch, atlanta, ga, usa.
"Thought this was a good representation of lost love and revenge. Will read more of your stuff soon." -- Judith Goff, USA.


Stateville Nights by Dane Anderson (5)
"Right... I liked the bit 'the air is clean thoughts of my past' other than that I found it a bit trite, not to be churlish but you were daring me with your description of what the poem was about. " -- Iam.
"Well I spent five years in prison and if this is trite, then my mind and soul must have never been affected by the harsh reality of being held captive. " -- Dane .
"Dane: See your own description. You cannot pretend to be the authority on good writing... no one is... no one can write the standard. And having a life of difficulty or tragedy does not automatically qualify you to write well. Nor to know the truth. Remember, the world is full of more saddness than anyone of us will ever know, enough to make anyone humble." -- Iam.
"interesting, the phrasing could flow better......I recommend the following: "the art and craft of poetry " by budgeja......( and yes I am married to a poet....so I read it all day long...) keep going.....and think outside of the box....use the metaphor more often." -- patricia.
"I actually have that book but I realize there is no book or guide to poetry. Do think Jim Morrison used others advice. Of course not. I read published poets today and wonder how they even made it. " -- Dane.


Soon by Emily Hunter (2)
"The way you put your feelings into words is amazing... I can feel the urgency of the two lovers colliding... I think you have a lot of talent and use it well. Thank you." -- hunter.
"Not sure about this one. Unless you are talking about someone killed on 9/11 (and if you are it could do with being clearer)then I think the line re September 11 should be scrapped. It confuses the meaning of the poem. I understood this to be a sweet love poem about two people meeting for the first time. The bombing inference is so big that it completely overrides the simplicity of what you are trying to say. Suddenly I wasn't thinking about a love poem, I was thinking about 3000 dead people." -- Sooz, Dalton, England, Cumbria.


Scratched To Grey by Peter Rivendell (1)
"wow, this is really good. i can understnad your pain" -- Daniel Gonzales, Whittier, CA.


Remember The Wee Dog by Stuart Eric Longridge (2)
"So was it a Dog?" -- Keith, Belfast, N.Ireland.
"Oh eye, it is a dog if that's the way you want to describe it. I've seen it too about eight years ago in Enstymoon. It's a night dweller alright." -- Be be the ed of the suckmaster times.


Please Every Night by Rae (1)
"I like this one ALOT...well, what can I say, I like all your stuff" -- Michelle.


Online Convo 1 by Kirsten McManus (1)
"Had some really good parts, consistent tone, clever (a bit smart assed), but I enjoyed it. " -- Iam.


Once Upon A Time by Preston Miles Metz (1)
"Aww bless him. Cute poem. It reads smoothly and although a sing-song rhyme it didn't strike me as either too cat/mat or too horibly gushing. Not one that will stay with me 'forever' but none-the-less a pleasant read Thanks. " -- Sooz, Dalton, England, Cumbria.


Near Breaking Time by Iam Hack (2)
"Well written with a sound ending made me, the reader, hunger for more." -- Ulysses Hero, England.
"I like the feel of the poem, and especially powerful is the line "they insist on laying hands on your readiness." -- Mia Angello, Mt. Horeb, WI, USA.


Lost by Emily Hunter (3)
"Sounds as if you were hurt bad. Putting aside grammar and punctuation, I, the reader, feel the pain and frustration of the writer. Well done." -- Ulysses Hero, England.
"Loved the feeling you put in. The pain sticks out while the stupidity of us men is sometimes embarrassing. Don't you change, strength is to be cherished not thrown away." -- eddie charles, raleigh, nc, usa.
"Ahh, Emily, where have you gone? I hope the world holds you dear to its heart, as I still do." -- Hunter.


Faded Edges by A J Magy (5)
"Reminiscence for a lost love beautifully expressed! Having read "Bodies at Rest" first which can stand alone as it is, was initially interpeted by me in more general universal terms. However this is more specific and brings both pieces together nicely.!!!" -- Monte, USA.
" #1 Title: Excellent. #2 Spelling and grammatical errors: None. #3 Opinion: Clear. #4 Suggestions: None. " -- JA St.George.
"I am fairly new to the site and I enjoy being so addicted to it that I spend my 3rd block class perusing the other authors. I haven't found too many (as of yet-I am, again, fairly new) that I truly enjoy reading. You are definitely one of them. I was surprised and what good rhythm this piece had. Its appearance suggests as well as its title suggests otherwise. My favorite aspect of poetry is the rhythm, the flow, and what I've read of you so far has a unique and easy to become attached to style. I look forward to reading more!" -- Tami Lynn, Evanston, IL, USA.
"*****I loved this, it's really good. It has nice flow and rhythmn. good luck-good writing :)" -- d donely.
"Lovely poem. It's very heart warming.. indeed. A job well done." -- Aarthi Vijayakumar, India.


Evening by Swish Checkley (1)
"This is great, and it`s a shame it`s not been read more or reviewed." -- Peter Rivendell.


Devolution. The Box by Ulysses Hero (2)
"close...but u didnt quite catch it....but ur imagery is clear and powerful....fine tune, my man" -- sunny, DC, USA.
"Do you remember when colour first hit our living rooms with a bang. Nation-wide people came down with headaches and mass hysteria blamed colour telly. I can remember my dad refusing to have one so we had black and white for another ten years before he risked a colour and a packet of paracetamol on stand-by. On telly last week they had a designer telly the screen was set in a wrought iron 'spider' and it rested on spindly legs, funky but far from practicle in a houseful of animals and kids. Loved this poem and voted accordingly. " -- Sooz, Dalton, England, Cumbria.


Decent Proposal by Ramkumar Menon (2)
"I like the way he writes and I like the structure of the poem, the meaning is nice" -- Ivonne, Lima, Lima, Peru.
"Hi, Its wonderful to see romance still exists ,keep writing." -- Diana Venditti.


Dear Momma by Rosalyn Ann Gover (1)
"I wrote this at 3am the day after the 4 year anniversary. I hope you enjoy this poem, and I hope you remember to remind your loved ones that you love them. I never had the chance." -- The Author, Vancouver, Washington, USA.


Dance Of Death by David B Doc Byron (1)
"Hi D Doc I like this story. This is the first story ive read of yours. I think your a very good writer and I wish you luck in the future." -- Francis James Chudley.


Consequently... by Christy Mack (1)
"I like this Ms. Mack, amazing work for a 2 minute stream of creative prose! It's funny sometimes how some of our best efforts in writing come in a flashes of short burst. Unexpected and subconscious energy that pours out on the page effortlessly. I wish it could always be that easy!" -- Monte, USA.


Casualty by Francis James Chudley (1)
"Whaaaaaaaaaaaaaaat you got to gog there er woo woo howzabout this makes no sense good story poem prose read it again do another pleazey meaze" -- Gwimbob.


Can You Lend Me A Tenner Son? A What? by Stuart Eric Longridge (1)
"Scary Stuff. Since the Holly and Jessica murder a scheme has been brought in to micro-chip our children so that parents can trace their movements at any time. Is this keeping our children safe or keeping them chained? Will they be used to monitor our partners? Where does it begin and where does it end? I don't like the idea that my money only exists on a statement. Strong poem .. scary stuff. " -- Sooz, Dalton, Cumbria, England.


By Hunter For Emily by Emily Hunter (1)
"Emily - wish you'd write some more - i know it must be painful but you certainly have a way with words that reaches out and grabs me and I bet others too." -- eddie charles, Raleigh, nc.


Blink by Ulysses Hero (7)
"awesome....very very good....no need for improvements, u've knocked me over." -- sunny, DC, USA.
"I was wondering why you used "past" instead of passed, and "your" instead of you're. Otherwise I found your poem very interesting and liked the fish-in-a-net imagery." -- mia angello, WI, USA.
"Thanks. All I have to do now is work out how to edit the poem!" -- Ulysses Hero, England.
"Another masterpiece! The man has knocked me over again. " -- david Doc Byron, vincennes, us, ind.
"Liked it, good ending, my only concern was if it is through the eyes of a child why the use of such words as Victorian and baroque? " -- Iam.
"Very nice !!!!!" -- Judi, Tampa, FL:, USA.
"Will the grammar police ever go away? I like it the way it is." -- R. Bennett Okerstrom.


Before 6 by Ulysses Hero (1)
"I love the image of gold hair as coins, very vivid. Good ending. The only thing I'm not sure of is 'land of expressive nature' - it sounds like your being ironic about expression, which of course may well have been your intention. I wonder if you could leave that bit out and just end it on 'before she traded...' Not sure... But all in all, another enjoyable read." -- Iam.


An Ode To My Love by L A Winterburn (4)
"It's very touching & sincere.It reminds me of Therapy? lyrics. Bang on the money." -- Lecky, nott's, England.
"Honey, you truly have a gift of speaking from the heart...and I feel so lucky to have found you. It's not often that you find someone who can touch your heart and soul the way you have mine. I love you......." -- K.
"I like it!" -- Brooklyn Ashe, Illinois, USA.
"just re-read this. Wanted to tell u that I love you." -- me.


All Guilt... by Iam Hack (4)
"This is good. Short too the point and well written." -- Ulysses Hero, England.
"Good Job! With only five lines your poem speaks volumes!! I am impressed." -- Monte, usa.
"After your review of my work, thought I'd return the favor and check you out. This was much deeper than five lines would suggest. Very nice !!!" -- Judi, Tampa, FL, USA.
"Very good imagery, I like this one. Gj" -- Dave Sutton.


Aimless by Alberto Pupo (1)
"I could relate to the message of your poem. You may consider adjusting the meter." -- mia angello, WI, USA.


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