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(As Long As I Keep Walking) Walking The Road by Chloe L Batey (1)
"Okay where to start. It would help if I had a melody to work with because then it's just a poem. First Stanza(1): Two rhymes-Do you think that works for a song? 2nd Line is long/has long words-Do you think it could be sung easy, and flow easily into the next paragraph. Overall, I understand right away that you're struggling with your self. Good. I like the stone connection to thoughts. 2nd Stanza (2): Good first line. Second line reverses words to complete rhyme at end (turn wrong)-Do you think that works? I do understand-you're towing the line and don't want to make mistakes. Maybe it's being too obvious. Imagery? 3rd Stanza/Chorus (3): I like it-it's catchy..Walkin' the road. (4): This is your stanza! Better words, no exact double rhyme. It's like you started writing here. Possibly change a couple of small words for rhythm. I need the music! (5): Chorus repeat (6): Bridge to double chorus-this seems fine. I'd have to hear the melody. It almost reminds me of the Johnny Cash song, Walk the Line. You're walking the road. I like it. I can probably do better with review with music, and the ability to revise the piece a little and knock it together until we get something different then match it against the original piece. Then print the best result." -- Howard.


Looking Through Your Eyes by Annabelle Elizabeth Rae Summers (2)
"I'd say "into" instead of "through" your eyes." -- Michael.
"Only for the last line, "in" should replace the other two" -- Michael.


Fade To Black by Annabelle Elizabeth Rae Summers (2)
"Haha this is a song title from Metallica. " -- Michael.
"oh cool lol " -- Annabelle.


Concrete Angel by Annabelle Elizabeth Rae Summers (2)
"u didnt make this song.. concrete angel is by martina mcbride. this is called plagerism. thats illegal" -- ashley.
"This song is by Martina McBride. It's illegal to plagiarize and you could be arrested!" -- Jamie.


Caught U Chatting On The Net by Cedric McClester (1)
"When I�m flesh �n blood (ya see) And she�s a cyber fantasy that is so true.... nice wordings " -- A Bhambra, Hayes, Middlesex, United Kingdom.


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