AUTHOR'S OTHER TITLES (1) Kitchen Light (Poetry) The warmth of a new home. [68 words]
Godsmith M. Parker
Godsmith
I want to be a godsmith, fashion them with my grubby hands, pull the blood from my guts, to shape these mutts for humanity...
Crack their skin like the rough slave hands, break-- their backs make-- them feel oppression, depression, the regression of their own souls...
Rub grit in their swollen eyes, and then wink....... and tell them salvation is nigh.
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"Being a heathen is not a crime. Justifying it with poor imagery and inept metaphors is. " -- Adam James Magy, Southfield, MI, United States.
"Poetry is art; art is thought; thought is emotive. Don't lose sight by narrow thinkers such as above. Keep writing, keep thinking, keep the faith (apologies for the irony!!)" -- Joel Seath, Portsmouth, England.
"Thinking that perhaps I had misjudged, or indeed been narrow-minded, I reread this piece. It still comes off poorly. It is filled with baseless rage which you have struggled to make "poetic", but failed. Not everyone has what it takes to be a wordsmith. Perhaps carpentry would suit you better. " -- A J Magy, Southfield, MI, USA.
"I like this poem. The emotional tone is consistent. I was moved by it, and felt that I understood your meaning. I'm not sure why you use the double dashes, I would have left them out, but otherwise, I wouldn't change anything. BTW, I would ignore this critic who seems so sure of himself - he doth protest too much to be for real. This site is for the most part habitated by novice writers who are looking for constructive criticism, not unjustified hostility. Many great and famous writers were told to give up. They didn't, and you shouldn't either. Write on!" -- Julia Tripp, Ontario, Canada.
"I just dont get it. The words here didnt speak to me at all. I couldnt grasp the point that you were trying to put across in this piece. But still I say, keep on writing. " -- Steve Barney, Garden City, Michigan.
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