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Finding Fleur by Sue (Sooz) Simpson Katy desperately wants to find Fleur, but does Fleur want to be found? [1,727 words]
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Dark Solitude. by Sue (Sooz) Simpson A woman alone on the moors when a storm threatens, but this is no ordinanry storm and that is no... [1,434 words]
Creeping Up From Behind. by Sue (Sooz) Simpson You can't ever really know what someone else is thinking ... unless they choose to tel... [925 words]
Cold, Cold Night.. by Sue (Sooz) Simpson The night was beautiful but biting, she had to make her final farewells, a cigarette would h... [630 words]
Car Trouble by Sue (Sooz) Simpson Boys will be boys. [496 words]
Breakfast In Bed by Sue (Sooz) Simpson She loved her husband so much, and a sepcial man deserves a special breakfast. [1,633 words]
Barriers by Sue (Sooz) Simpson Everybody's frightened of the prisoner in the cell at the end of the block. [2,913 words]
Bandit At Twelve-O-Clock by Sue (Sooz) Simpson A sinister note drops through her letter box, but who is it from and what's it all abo... [2,144 words]
Attractions by Sue (Sooz) Simpson People stared at the sisters and called them freaks. [678 words]
Apple Of His Eye by Sue (Sooz) Simpson Daddy's little girl, Daddy's little sweetheart. (May be deemed offensive). [1,742 words]
Angel Stew by Sue (Sooz) Simpson The kitchens are in uproar. [826 words]
Agony by Sue (Sooz) Simpson The First in a series of Agony columns written by the unstoppable Aunt Nasty. (May be deemed offensive) [1,200 words]
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TITLE (EDIT)
Deadly Persuit |
DESCRIPTION
Nature at its most cruel .. when it's interfered with by man.
[1,541 words] |
TITLE KEYWORD
Drama |
AUTHOR
Sue (Sooz) Simpson |
ABOUT
THE AUTHOR
I'm thirty nine, recently single again. I have two boys Cli' (pronounced clee) Real name Christopher and Mark. I'm a care in the community nurse and formerly (when I was married) an occupational Therapist working with the mentally ill on a secure unit. I love reading and writing and meeting people. I hate offal, seafood and intolerance. I keep dog, cat, polecats, rats and reptiles. And for seven years ran the second largest reptile sanctuary in Britain. Apart from having my lads, I think that's probably the most worthwhile thing I've ever done. Writing wise, I've been the main fiction writer for Legends magazine for three years.And have two books published 'Lizard's Leap' published by Quillusers, and 'Better the Devil You Know' soon to be released by Bestbooks.Um I drive a knackered old Astra, and ride a two litre trike. I live in the lake district of England, and am happy. :-)
[January 2003] |
AUTHOR'S E-MAIL ADDRESS
[email protected] |
AUTHOR'S OTHER TITLES (84)
A Fork In The Road. (Short Stories) A paradox revolving round the lonely Holker Mosses in the dead of night. [2,835 words] [Mystery]
A Twist In The Tail (Short Stories) - [963 words]
Agony (Short Stories) The First in a series of Agony columns written by the unstoppable Aunt Nasty. (May be deemed offensive) [1,200 words] [Comedy]
Agony 2 (Short Stories) Morew from the irrepresible Aunt Nasty (May be deemed offensive). [1,077 words] [Comedy]
Angel Stew (Short Stories) The kitchens are in uproar. [826 words] [Comedy]
Anne (Short Stories) - [707 words]
Apple Of His Eye (Short Stories) Daddy's little girl, Daddy's little sweetheart. (May be deemed offensive). [1,742 words] [Drama]
Attractions (Short Stories) People stared at the sisters and called them freaks. [678 words] [Drama]
Bandit At Twelve-O-Clock (Short Stories) A sinister note drops through her letter box, but who is it from and what's it all about? [2,144 words] [Drama]
Barriers (Short Stories) Everybody's frightened of the prisoner in the cell at the end of the block. [2,913 words] [Thriller]
Breakfast In Bed (Short Stories) She loved her husband so much, and a sepcial man deserves a special breakfast. [1,633 words] [Horror]
Car Trouble (Short Stories) Boys will be boys. [496 words] [Comedy]
Cat's Chorus (Short Stories) - [1,332 words]
Cherry Blossom (Short Stories) - [435 words]
Cold, Cold Night.. (Short Stories) The night was beautiful but biting, she had to make her final farewells, a cigarette would help. [630 words] [Drama]
Creeping Up From Behind. (Short Stories) You can't ever really know what someone else is thinking ... unless they choose to tell you. [925 words] [Drama]
Dark Solitude. (Short Stories) A woman alone on the moors when a storm threatens, but this is no ordinanry storm and that is no ordinary lady. [1,434 words] [Drama]
Dawn Rising (Short Stories) He looked at his own personal sunrise every morning, yet longed for the warmth of the sun. [1,069 words] [Drama]
Deep Blue Eastern Light (Poetry) I've never been to Budapest, but I saw an image on a postcard, it was misty and had a sort of dreamy quality about it. I wondered about the spirit of Budapest. Hope I've done her justicce. [204 words]
Different Road (Short Stories) Charlie is running scared. Will he find his way before his precious time runs out? [521 words]
Empty House (Short Stories) This had been her domain, now it was only a shadow. [649 words] [Drama]
Find Me A Place (Poetry) Everybody needs somewhere to run. [193 words] [Drama]
Finding Fleur (Short Stories) Katy desperately wants to find Fleur, but does Fleur want to be found? [1,727 words] [Drama]
Four Minute Warning (Short Stories) - [476 words] [Comedy]
Freedom By Another Name (Short Stories) He's an imposter [557 words] [Drama]
Furtive Glances (Short Stories) Always the last to know! [891 words] [Drama]
Galaxy (Poetry) Let Venus bear witness and Mars be our guide. [139 words]
Hickory, Dickory, Dock (Short Stories) - [991 words] [Drama]
Is The Toilet Roll Half Full Or Half Empty (Short Stories) It's hard when you're at bursting point. [423 words] [Comedy]
I've Always Wanted To Write... But! (Short Stories) There's always an excuse if you want to find one. [510 words] [Mind]
Jasmine And Gardenia Love (Poetry) - [417 words] [Erotic]
Jinny (Poetry) - [176 words]
Just The Ticket (Short Stories) You pays your money and you takes your chances. [5,177 words] [Drama]
Knockers (Short Stories) It's a dirty job, but someone's got to do it. [2,210 words] [Drama]
Little Bird (Short Stories) He liked fragile things [1,406 words] [Drama]
Lizards Leap (Novels) Four children buy an intricately carved frame from a school fair. A crazy old woman chases them desperately wanting the carving for herself. What is the mystery surrounding the strange frame? [5,753 words] [Adventure]
Long Walk Back To Jurassica (Poetry) Evolution and progress or three million steps backwards? [323 words] [Drama]
Lookingthrough The Window (Short Stories) - [401 words]
Madness Becomes You (Short Stories) She used to be someone, now she's several people, or maybe she's nobody at all, it makes no difference. [394 words] [Drama]
Making My Way Back To You. (Short Stories) She'd told them a thousand times to keep the front door closed, now tragedy had struck. [1,926 words] [Drama]
Memberwhen (Poetry) Memberwhen that mystical word of long ago memories. [189 words] [Drama]
Mortar Doesn't Breathe. (Short Stories) The house was inanimate, dead ... because her child was gone. [1,114 words] [Drama]
Mourning Glory (Short Stories) One of my favourite pieces. Please note *This is not a children's story* It's the tale of a little girl trying to be a child. [1,786 words] [Drama]
Mumbles From The Madhouse (Novels) It was her first day on the secure unit and somehow she had to see it through. [2,215 words] [Drama]
My Friend The Tiger And Me (Poetry) I wrote this for my little boy when he was having trouble at school. [942 words] [Animal]
Naughty Bunny Goes To Ibiza (Short Stories) - [552 words]
One-Man Race (Short Stories) He had only his nerves to rely on. One slip and the race would be lost. [664 words] [Drama]
Out Of Print (Short Stories) A man, a boy, a love of reading and echoes of the past. [2,007 words] [Drama]
Outrun The River (Poetry) The snow was melting fast and he owed it to himself and his seld of dogs to make it to safety. [145 words] [Action]
Pact Of Joy. (Short Stories) Don't we all just want to be happy? [2,497 words] [Drama]
Play With Me Please. (Short Stories) - [322 words]
Return Of The Hellcat (Erotica May Be Offensive) (Short Stories) Please do not read this one if easily offended. Or even not so easily offended. Continuing sexploits of Dark Solitude. [3,390 words] [Erotic]
Room For One More (Short Stories) The dream was haunting and wouldn't leave Mike alone. [1,728 words] [Drama]
Rush Hour (Short Stories) - [419 words]
Sally (Short Stories) - [2,268 words]
Sinister Music (Novels) She had no psychic ability, so why had fate chosen her to foretell of the spate of brutal murders? [6,114 words] [Drama]
So This Is My Life Then (Short Stories) - [517 words] [Comedy]
Space Walk (Short Stories) May Cause offense. [1,290 words] [Drama]
Spirit Dancer (Poetry) - [514 words]
Sweet Child Of Mine (Short Stories) The old lady had been brutally mugged, her son was sucjh a good boy, but would his thoughts now turn to revenge? [1,843 words] [Drama]
Tangled Web (Short Stories) Treat `em mean and keep `em keen. [596 words] [Drama]
The Band Played On (Short Stories) - [1,486 words] [Drama]
The Big Picture (Short Stories) The little girl was a great artist, but her subject matter was giving cause for concern. [776 words] [Drama]
The Comet. (Short Stories) Remember! [796 words] [Drama]
The Dinosaur (Short Stories) - [1,523 words]
The Half Empty Glass. (Short Stories) They had no idea of the horror they were walking into. [3,030 words] [Drama]
The Hhmmm Efect (Poetry) - [783 words]
The Iceberg (Short Stories) She had to break the hold they had on him... release him from his parents grip. [410 words] [Drama]
The Joker (Short Stories) - [2,032 words]
The Lovers (Poetry) - [124 words]
The Mark Of Jack (Short Stories) The start of something maybe. [1,044 words] [Drama]
The Old Enemy (Short Stories) I just hope I've got the names right. [253 words] [Drama]
The Rosary (Short Stories) May cause offense. [422 words]
The Spark (Short Stories) - [557 words]
The Thirteenth Station (Short Stories) - [8,024 words] [Horror]
The Village Green. (Short Stories) - [559 words] [Drama]
Three Mile Gap (Poetry) So close and yet... [285 words] [Drama]
Tomorrow Lies Beside Us (Poetry) - [239 words] [Drama]
Tusk (Short Stories) - [1,012 words] [Drama]
Under The Whether (Short Stories) - [1,626 words]
Watching And Waiting (Short Stories) - [1,253 words] [Drama]
White Icing (Short Stories) - [1,385 words]
Worlds Biggest Loser (Short Stories) - [114 words]
You Are My Sunshine (Short Stories) - [1,285 words]
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READER'S REVIEWS (6)
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"You write with a grace that befits something more genius than what you are writing, don�t get me wrong I like what you write, you write for the world to read and see your exact pictures of it...and I am collapsed in inspiration to see this in your work...but-you have a style which I believe would be more radiant from another, more artful angle. Please don�t take offence to these comments, I�m not attempting to condescend you, it�s merely my opinion...a young and probably foolish one. Something that you feel will find its own form, try writing what you want bottomless from bottom of mind-in tranced fixation dreaming upon subjects before you." -- Duluoz.
"This is a very vivid description, and I think technically accurate, of the feeding of a large captive snake. I wasn't sure where you were going with it as a story, but it did hold my attention. As a mean old English teacher the fist thing I noticed about this one was the spelling error in the title; it should be "pursuit". There are a few other proof-reading errors through the text. I won't reproduce them all, but as examples: mixture of "his" and "its" for the hare - should be consistent; "sniffing the air with disinterest" should be "without interest" ("disinterest" has a different meaning); "on the snakes back" should be "on the snake's back", the word "mesmerised " used in two conserquetive sentences and spelled differently each time, etc. Just before the end the narration suddenly jumps into the present tense for two paragraphs, then back to the past. Perhaps this is a story you wrote when you were younger, as most of your work seems technically okay. For presenting something on the Net I think it's worth tidying it up. Enjoyed the read though." -- David Gardiner, London, England.
"It seems you didn't listen to the "advisor" here either. You've had plenty of time to change the spelling. Correct spelling is "pursuit," but hey you can believe what ever you want, though it don't make it so." -- David.
"Thanks David G, I've changed my copy but don't know how to edit on here. I appreciate your comments. I used to run a reptile sanctuary and saw this man in various bodies several times. Reptile keeping replaced Rottweiller keeping here in Britain as the latest 'hard man' fad a few years ago. I've seen many unbelieveable acts of cruellty, but for the most part the neglect was just through ignorance. Thanks again." -- Sooz, Dalton, England, Cumbria.
" Achy�s Review: Deadly Persuit ***>***Sue (Sooz) Simpson The man walked to the door with a cardboard box under his arm, he laid it down while he unlocked the three bolts and the padlock with the utmost care. The inner room was of an average size, well for a regular household room that is. The entire outside wall was taken up by a huge heavily re-enforced plate glass window, so that the whole room could be clearly seen from outside.The man quickly released the clasp on the box and pulled out a huge buck hare by the ears. He was a big one weighing a good twenty pounds, plenty of meat on him. The hare kicked out furious at being hoisted in this indelicate manner. All the time screeching. His only attack the strong hind legs and his high pitched keening scream.With the deftness that comes of much practise ***>*** the man swiftly broke the hare�s hind legs over his knee. The animal screamed, a noise sickeningly like a human baby in agony and writhed beneath his immovable grip. He threw it viciously into the middle of the room and quickly slipped out, locking the doors meticulously behind him. He then stood at the window to watch, the wonder of nature at her most cruel. He had seen this countless times before, but the thrill of it never left him.The hare sensed death the instant its feet touched the floor. It touched down and immediately jumped three foot into the air as if the floor was electrified. Despite it�s crushed legs he flew madly round the room dragging his hind quarters limply behind, looking for escape and finding none, it cowered in the farthest corner shaking and trembling. This was the room belonging to the Boids. The twelve foot ***>*** plus Boas and Pythons. ***>*** Tessa the Common Boa, had been fed, as had Lotus and Bambi, two of the Burmese Pythons. Ebakaneza a fourteen foot Reticulated Python moved his head slightly. He lazily flicked his tongue sniffing the air with disinterest and bent it to point at the various corners of the massive vivarium until he caught the scent of the hare in the far corner. Then he began to move slowly towards the tantalizing smell of petrified animal. There was nothing lazy about his tongue now. It was flickering with lightning rapidity, sensing out the hare, smelling and tasting the air. He got within three feet of the wounded prey, it jumped high landing on the snakes back. The snake hissed loudly and recoiled in anger. It lunged at the hare, just missing him as the hare bounced all over the room in a blind and furious panic. He landed on Bamboo briefly. She uncoiled and made a half hearted lunge at theterrified ***>***creature.The hare found another corner and crouched low, panting, his eyes bulging with fear. He began to sway, never once taking his eyes off the snake, that was making it�s ***>*** unhurried way towards him again. The hare instinctively knew which of the huge snakes was the biggest threat to him, he never gave the others much of a glance but he kept his eyes riveted on Ebby.The next strike was intended to mean business. Ebby again got within three feet of the hare and he held it with his gaze psyching it out, freaking it. The hare was mesmerized. It gave a few warning thumps with it�s smashed hind legs but it�s eyes never left the snakes. Fourteen foot long and a girth of fifteen inch. He was a big Python, and had a lot of growing still to do. The hare swayed, mesmerised ***>*** beneath Ebby�s glare. As suddenly as it began the dance of death was over. Ebby took one last tongue flicking smell of the hare and then lunged. Only the last foot of his body moved. His huge mouth, opened over a foot wide to reveal, pure white convex fangs. The strike was as fast as the blink of an eye. He grabbed the hare by the throat, and rapidly coiled his immense body four times round the prey. The hare screamed. It kicked out wildly with its back legs, but it only fought against air. The snake was too experienced and wily to leave part of his body where it could be kicked and clawed. Still holding the hare tightly by the neck, the snake loosened his coils a hairs breadth, allowing the hare the luxury of an inhalation. The hare gasped greedily for air, taking in a huge lungful, then before the hare could exhale Ebby went in for the death cuddle. He tensed all his muscles and increased the pressure upon the creature tightening his coils, and pulling them into a taut blanket around the dying hares body. The hare knew that it was hopeless. He gave up struggling and waited for death to relieve him of his suffering. His eyes bulged deeply out of their sockets as the pressure was increased.The poor animal�s internal organs were crushed long before it went limp. Immense coils gradually increasing the pressure upon its heart. It took the hare ninety seconds to die. The Python increased his hold for a further sixty seconds. A kill was to be savored. From the second he had made the first coil, his gastric acids had begun to prepare themselves for breaking down the flesh, fur and bones of the hare.A minute after the hare was dead, Ebby pulled his long curled fangs from deeply within the hares ***>*** neck, ***>*** The fangs are designed like hooks, so that when they enter their prey, they curl forward. This ensures that a secure grip is maintained. The fangs made a loud �plopping� sound as they came away from the kills ***>*** neck. Then he uncurled himself, and looked at his prize. none ***>*** of the other snakes paid any attention to what was going on. The next thing the snake did was to glide several times over the recumbent body of the hare. Much as a mortician measures his corpse so Ebby measured his kill. Then he started to nudge it with his blunt nose down both sides, and along its rump. This served two purposes, it straightened the hare out, to make it more streamlined, and it allowed the snake to measure his lunch. When he was entirely satisfied with the position and sizing of his meal, he moved very slowly towards the hares ***>*** head.Lining himself up he raised his head three inches off the floor and began to open his mouth, slowly. When his mouth was open he moved his lower mandible several times to either side, this enabled him to dislocate his jaw, so that it fell back as though on a hinge. It looked like a yawn as he stretched the now dislocate jaw, his mouth opening wider and wider. The Jacob�s Organ glistening white along the bottom of his mouth. This is a tube that allows the snake to breathe when his windpipe is completely covered by the carcass of his kill. Now he was ready to begin the slow business of swallowing his prize. He took the hare�s nose gently into his mouth. The hares head is three times larger than his own. Gradually by moving his mouth side to side, the hares head moves further and further into his mouth, until its nose has moved into his neck. Then Ebby stops and contracts every muscle in his entire body, as he squeezes down on the body, of the kill, it moves slightly further down his neck. He then opens his mouth stretches it a little further and moves the hare an inch further in. He stops and then repeats the muscle clenching. In this way, alternating between mouthing up the hares body, and using his muscles to maneuver it down his gullet, the hare slowly began to disappear. By the time the snake has reached the hares shoulders, the snake�s skin around, the bulge of the hare is stretched until it becomes translucent. Anybody seeing this for the first time would be convinced that the snake was going to split. All his markings had become elongated, much as the pattern on a lycra dress stretches on a too big body.It takes the snake twenty minutes to swallow the hare and then he lies with an obscene bulge gradually moving down the inside of him. You can trace the hares, head, feet and body, through the skin of the snake.Ebby is now sated, and will not be fed for at least another week, as in the wild a Burmese python may take a deer. This would be enough to feed him for several months, if there was a shortage of food.The black spurs either side of his cloaca dug into the soft substrate. He stretches his dislocated mouth a couple more times. Then an audible click can be heard as it snaps back into position. Ebby slides back into his fibre glass ***>*** cave. For the next couple of days he is watchful, dangerous. He is at his most vulnerable. He lies in the darkness of the carvern ***>*** at the far end of the immense room. Now he will sleep. The man smiled as he moved away from the Vivarium ***>***. He never tired of watching the Deadly Pursuit. ---------------- Kent�s Review: The kind of help this writer needs I can�t provide. Cam, you really ought to help the writer of this piece get some professional mental help. �the man swiftly broke the hare�s hind legs over his knee. The animal screamed, a noise sickeningly like a human baby in agony and writhed beneath his immovable grip. He threw it viciously into the middle of the room� -------------- Homespun�s Review: Kent, even if a writer �is� insane we must keep an eye on the work, not its author. BTW Achy makes some valuable points in correction. I personally think that the story might be a tough sell. " -- Cam Davis.
"Thanks for the reviews all. Is it a sign of mental instability to show the ugly side of the world? http://members.lycos.co.uk/suesimpson/" -- Sooz, Dalton-in-Furness, England, Cumbria.
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COPYRIGHT NOTICE
© 1999 Sue (Sooz) Simpson |
STORYMANIA PUBLICATION DATE
March 2002 |
NUMBER OF TIMES TITLE VIEWED
491
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